Tornstar (vs. a Clan cat gone rogue)

[Tornstar]

"AAAAAAAAH!" Tornstar yells as he charges toward Wildheart with lethal claws. He leaps at Wildheart and slashes along his side. "Yeah, finally a good fight!" Tornstar yowls with freakishly evil delight. "Come on fight back!" Torn taunts. "I need some fun." he said. 'Ha I feel this one I'm gonna have fun with.' he thinks gleefully. Torn then pads around Wildheart in a circular order slowly. 'Ha this'll get him raving with suspension for an attack.' he thought. Torn was getting bored with just walking and not fighting.

[[C]laystar--]

Torn, can you please edit this RP sample so that it doesn't god mode?

[Tornstar]

what do u mean as in make it an actual post for rp examples???

[[C]laystar--]

Yes. The RP sample is to see what your posts are like under normal circumstances... so, basically, it would be like a complete post that would be a response to another.

[Tornstar]

((ok no prob, can tht be like a play script like we go by that we fight, I win?))

"Hey are you Wildheart?" Tornstar called out to the rogue. "I heard you were strong, wanna fight." he challenged.

[[C]laystar--]

I think we've missunderstood each other. What you need to do is modify the original post so that it is like a starting post for a thread. Something you would post once you were accepted in the RP boards. We are a semiliterate site, and one liners are not accepted.

Sorry if I confused you.

--Wheaty

[Tornstar]

ok fixed

[[C]laystar--]

It needs to be longer, Torn. Look at the accepted roleplay samples. Many of them are multiple paragraphs. Though it doesn't need to be multiple paragraphs, the one that you do submit needs to be more developed.

Sorry. Keep trying.

--Wheaty

[Tornstar]

so u want me to do a paragraph, but no gmoding right? 4 senteces max

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No, not four sentences max. That's way too short! This is a semi-literate role playing site. This post alone has more then four sentences. And, no using excuses like having no imagination. You can get accepted through pure effort.

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[Tornstar]

no i meant 4 MORE sentences max XP sorry for confusion

[Tornstar]

but im done nonetheless

[[s].x.[p].x.[e].x.[l].x.[l]]

Done? But... You didn't do anything Wheaty-chan asked. Nothing changed.

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[Wheaty the Lazy]

Not to mention it is still godding. You cannot god in regular RPing, and you cannot god in this post.

--Wheaty

[Tornstar]

hey Wheaty look at the first post i was modifying it this whole time ^^ ((u didn't notice lol))